Feedback Journal: Graduate Writing II
Name: XXXX
Week 1: Feedback Preferences
What kind of feedback would you like to receive from your instructor? On what aspect of writing would you most like to receive feedback?”
I want feedback on the clarity, organization, and logical flow of my writing, particularly in academic arguments and thesis development. Additionally, I would appreciate guidance on strengthening my scholarly tone, effectively incorporating peer-reviewed evidence, and improving APA formatting. Feedback on grammar, sentence structure, and avoiding passive voice would also be valuable: Feedback Journal: Graduate Writing II.
| Date | Piece of writing (title, description, etc.) | Area where excelled | The issue to work on | Resources to review | Plan for revision / future writing
Optional: Questions to ask the instructor or the Writing Center. |
| March 3rd | Discussion Post: Gaps and Opportunities in Healthcare Services | Successfully identified service gaps and integrated systems thinking into the approach. | Lacked detailed financial analysis to support proposed solutions. | Financial management resources and budget planning guides (Leao et al., 2023) on value-based care models.
(https://doi.org/10.1007/s40258-023-00790-z)
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Strengthen financial components by researching budget impacts and integrating fiscal considerations. Enhance clarity by quantifying financial benefits. Apply the MEAL paragraph structure to better develop financial discussions. |
| March 5th | Brainstorming the Business Case | Presented a strong problem statement with clear solutions for improved patient care. | Needs improved organization, clarity, and integration of peer-reviewed sources. | Writing Center guides, journal article examples, Leibold & Schwarz, (2022) on instructor feedback preferences.
(https://doi.org/10.36021/jethe.v5i2.302)
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Improve structure, refine thesis development, and use scholarly references. Strengthen transitions for coherence. Ensure that the MEAL structure is used by expanding the explanation (E) and analysis (A) sections in each paragraph. |
| March 7th | Research Paper Draft: Evidence-Based Practice in Nursing | Effectively summarized research findings and demonstrated a good understanding of the topic. | Lacked depth in critical analysis and synthesis of sources. | Scholarly articles on evidence-based practice, (Lai, 2024b) on care gaps, Walden Writing Center on synthesis techniques. (https://academicguides.waldenu.edu/writingcenter/evidence/synthesis) |
Improve synthesis of sources by making stronger connections between studies. Provide a deeper analysis rather than a summary. Strengthen the Main Idea (M) in each paragraph by explicitly linking it to the thesis statement and reinforcing key arguments. |
Optional: Questions to Ask the Instructor or Writing Center
- How can I improve my financial analysis to align with business case expectations?
- What strategies can I use to better integrate scholarly sources for a stronger argument?
- How can I improve synthesis in research-based writing rather than just summarizing sources?
- What techniques can I use to maintain an academic tone while writing reflective essays?
Reflection and Future Goals
Regular reflection on feedback helps identify common writing challenges and track progress over time. By addressing financial analysis, structural clarity, synthesis of sources, and academic tone, future writing assignments will be more precise, well-supported, and effectively communicated. Continued engagement with writing resources, peer-reviewed literature, and feedback from instructors will further refine academic writing skills.
References
Lai, P. (2024a). Academic Guides: Using Evidence: Synthesis. Academicguides.waldenu.edu. https://academicguides.waldenu.edu/writingcenter/evidence/paraphrase/examples
Leao, D. L. L., Cremers, H.-P., van Veghel, D., Pavlova, M., & Groot, W. (2023). The impact of value-based payment models for networks of care and transmural care: A systematic literature review. Applied Health Economics and Health Policy, 21(3), 441–466. https://doi.org/10.1007/s40258-023-00790-z
Leibold, N., & Schwarz, L. M. (2022). Student Perceptions of Teacher Online Feedback. Journal of Effective Teaching in Higher Education, 5(2), 22–42. https://doi.org/10.36021/jethe.v5i2.302
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Question 
Using feedback is an important part of the writing process. Through feedback, writers have conversations which provide encouragement and suggestions on their colleagues’ work. This week, continue to build the dialogue with your instructor about the feedback you’ve received on your writing in this, and other, courses. Recording feedback in a journal also helps you track progress, celebrate successes, and keep resources handy.
In the Feedback Journal, you’ll document and track writing feedback you receive in this course, and your other classes. This is a living, breathing document—use it to also list helpful resources and links along the way in your writing journey.
To prepare for this Assignment:
- Gather and review the recent writing feedback you’ve received in this course and/or your other course. The feedback could be from discussions or assignments.
- Access the Feedback Journal worksheet from the Learning Resources.
- View the video below for directions to complete this activity.
By Day 7
- Using the Feedback Journal from the Learning Resources, record any writing feedback you have received in this course and/or your other courses.
- You must have at least two rows completed.

Feedback Journal: Graduate Writing II
Submission Information
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Article
- Gredler, J. (2018). Postsecondary online students’ preferences for text-based instructor feedbackLinks to an external site.. International Journal of Teaching and Learning in Higher Education, 30(2), 195-206
Websites
- Walden University Writing Center. (n.d.-a). Citations: OverviewLinks to an external site.. [Video]. https://academicguides.waldenu.edu/writingcenter/apa/citations
- Walden University Writing Center. (n.d.-g). Using evidence: Examples of paraphrasingLinks to an external site.. https://academicguides.waldenu.edu/writingcenter/evidence/paraphrase/examples
Note: Read the text and watch the short video on this page.
Documents:
- Document: Feedback Journal Download Feedback Journal(Word document)